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Succubus!

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Kooshmeister Says:

Nope, it appears to be the same script. Although I just did a once-over for the time being.

I found a couple of other differences besides the dialogue during the SWAT Kats and Felina's fight with the Tri-Head.

In the 5/13/94 (the one Mark sent me which was provided to him by the Tremblays), the captured Felina is revealed to her uncle when Otto presses a button, opening a hidden door where she's tied to a chair:

She whirls and nods as we PAN OVER to Laszlo, Otto and the other Servant. Otto pushes a button as an observatory wall spins to reveal a groggy Felina, tied to a chair. She looks up and REACTS, struggling against her bonds.

She activates the SWAT Kat beeper by rocking herself back and forth until the chair falls over so she can press the button:

OTS - ON KATRINA

The chair (its back is TO CAMERA, in the FOREGROUND) rocks back and forth as wee see that Felina's struggles have exposed the Swat Kat beeper in her back pocket.

KATRINA
Smart girl! But it won't save your uncle! By the end of the eclipse, he'll be totally drained!

ON FELINA

As she reacts, with a twist that sends her chair falling over backwards with a CRASH.

FELINA
Noooooo!!!

LOW ANGLE - FLOOR

As Felina sees the beeper and hits the button with her shoulder. The blue light begins to FLASH.

In the revised 5/17/94 draft the Tremblays gave to you, however, Felina is simply dragged into the observatory by Laszlo, Otto and the other guy, and thrown on the floor:

She turns as we PAN OVER to see Laszlo, Otto and the other Servant enter dragging a groggy Felina, bound with ropes. They drop her to the ground.

With her hands tied behind her back, she manages to press the button of the beeper in her pants pocket. It also happens right after she's brought in instead of slightly later:

*ANGLE - FELINA ON THE FLOOR

*We see the SWAT Kat beeper sticking out of her back pocket. PUSH IN as her bound hands find the button and press it. The BLUE LIGHT FLASHES.

Leopold still mentions the secret room later on during the climax, though, apparently forgetting during the revision that he'd written it out:

WIDER - TO INCLUDE TWO GARGOYLES (LASZLO AND SERVANT)

They've CRASHED through the wall of the hidden room and are using their GLOWING EYES to fire at Felina and T-Bone.

There's a few other differences as well. I'll have to catalogue them the way I did for The Pastmaster Always Rings Twice's script vs. its finished episode.

Statistics: Posted by Kooshmeister — Tue Jun 25, 2019 3:02 am

Kooshmeister Says:

Thanks, Mark. Next up is Turmoil 2, which ought to be a little livelier.

Statistics: Posted by Kooshmeister — Sat Nov 17, 2018 11:11 am

Behold my incredibly boring voice...

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Wx0bqDRBHcA

Don't worry, Koosh,I've heard worse voices. (My own, for example.) I think you did a good job retelling the script.

Statistics: Posted by marklungo — Sat Nov 17, 2018 10:43 am

Kooshmeister Says:

Behold my incredibly boring voice...

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Statistics: Posted by Kooshmeister — Fri Nov 16, 2018 10:23 pm

Kooshmeister Says:

I'll of course go through the two versions with a more fine-toothed comb later on to see what else is different, if anything. For now, though, those are the only things that leaped out at me.

Statistics: Posted by Kooshmeister — Tue Sep 18, 2018 2:16 pm

Echo Says:

I like "jettison glovatrixes" better, or maybe "TBone, eject glovatrixes!" or something along the line of that.

Statistics: Posted by Echo — Tue Sep 18, 2018 1:10 pm

In the revised version he says:
RAZOR
T-Bone! Set Glovatrixes to blow!
This is a... very odd change.

I think "blow" is supposed to mean "explode", but... yeah, not the best choice of words there.

Statistics: Posted by marklungo — Tue Sep 18, 2018 11:52 am

Nope, it appears to be the same script. Although I just did a once-over for the time being.

As it turns out, I found a couple of minor differences. The one Mark sent me is dated 5/13/94, while the final draft is also dated 5/13/94, but is identified as being revised 5/17/94.

In the copy Mark sent me, T-Bone has a line at the beginning of Act III that isn't present in the final version:

T-BONE
Good thing we got the Turbokat fixed in time!

In the same copy, when talking to her uncle in his office, Felina only identifies Katrina as "Ms. Moorkroft."

FELINA
No, it's getting to you. I'm going to have a little chat with Ms. Moorkroft.

In the one the Tremblays provided, she says:

FELINA
No, it's getting to you. I'm going to have a little chat with Ms. Katrina Moorkroft.

Identifying her by her first and last name.

Razor's dialogue in the original draft about how to handle the Tri-Head is different:

RAZOR
T-Bone! Jettison Glovatrixes!

In the revised version he says:

RAZOR
T-Bone! Set Glovatrixes to blow!

This is a... very odd change.

Statistics: Posted by Kooshmeister — Mon Sep 17, 2018 5:11 am

Okay, so I'm actually reading the script in it's entirety instead of just glancing through it.

Favorite line:

Felina: So you're not even going to check her out?

Feral: I certainly am. I'm meeting her for lunch.

*snort* OMG. I can't even imagine Feral saying that. XD

It’s such good snark though XD Feral deserves it.

Statistics: Posted by AkaneKitty — Sat Jul 28, 2018 8:49 pm

Ty-Chou Says:

Okay, so I'm actually reading the script in it's entirety instead of just glancing through it.

Favorite line:

Felina: So you're not even going to check her out?

Feral: I certainly am. I'm meeting her for lunch.

*snort* OMG. I can't even imagine Feral saying that. XD

Also this: (I am paraphrasing)

Feral: Imma ask her to marry me.

Felina: Uncle, no...

Feral: Uncle, YES!

Statistics: Posted by Ty-Chou — Sat Jul 28, 2018 8:43 pm